I'm editing smut and I love it.
I have my very own published author and she writes about middle-aged people getting it on like horny teenagers. I can't say that I am at all familiar with the heaving-bosom Romance genre; however, I can tell you that it makes my job as her editor way more fun than it should be. I mean, I can't believe I am getting paid for this. I get to write emails like this:
Hey D,
Tell me--when you say "he thrust his pulsing love-muscle deep within her over and over again, a steady jungle rhythm, her glistening breasts rose and fell beneath the hair-covered plain of his chest, her back tensed and arched with each exquisite climax", it's a bit run-on-ish, don't you think? Plus, the placement of the modifying phrase "a steady jungle rhythm" is problematic. Try this: "He thrust his pulsing love-muscle deep within her over and over again in a steady jungle rhythm. Her glistening breasts rose and fell beneath the hair-covered plain of his chest; her back tensed and arched with each exquisite climax."
Also, there is some dialogue during the tantric scene that should be omitted.
"Ride the wave"? That comes dangerously close to sounding like an Ocean Spray commercial.
P.S. In response to your earlier question, I believe the correct spelling is in fact c-u-m, but I will look into this matter further.
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